The Advantages of Studying Abroad
Every year the number of students studying abroad is increasing. These days, there is a lot of competition over the world because of globaliztion. If someone does not want to be behind other people, they should go to foreign countries to study. A lot of people think that foreign countries have many things better than their home country. Particularly, many of them go to North America and Europe to fulfill their dreams. Studying abroad has three major advantages. These include that to learn different culture, to study in better educational environment, and to make many friends.
4 comments:
It is a pretty good intro, I think you should add some more details for the last sentence in order to be similar to the intro in our books. "There are three advantages of studying abroad: .... ". One more thing is the second sentence, I think it'd better be "Every year the number of students studying abroad are increasing... "
It has clear idea about its thesis. Why don't you replace your 1st sentence to the end of your paragraph? Also, there is no explain about three advantages. And which one is better between 'a foreign country' and 'foreign countries'?
I think you should add many future contribution of international student in front of your introduction
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